How have we used our 100 words this week?

100 wc

A long time ago on halloween night a young boy Joey had a dream to be a knight and defeat the Ender Dragon. The Ender Dragon is black and no one has defeated it or suvived.Joey was very detirmend so that halloween he asked his mum if he could “mum can I go trick or treeting now.”Joey remeember the magic word ,it is…” .”Please yes I know!”And then Joey went to the End Portal, jumped in and then the noise of the streets stopped. Joey then saw the Ender Dragon flying around so he swallowed his fear and shot the Dragon and no one was sad  also Joey b ecame a knight

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  1.   Mrs. Schmidt (Team100WC) Says:

    Hi Molly,
    Thanks for taking part in the 100 Word Challenge this week. The young boy Joey is very brave to be going off to fight that mighty dragon all by himself! I wonder if his mum would have let him go if she knew where he was really going? Great description of him “swallowing his fear.” One suggestion I have is to get a friend to proofread your story next time because I do see some punctuation mistakes. Another is to trying using different time words in your story so you don’t overuse the word “then.” Try using next, after that, finally, etc
    Keep up the good work!
    Mrs. Schmidt
    Grade 3 teacher
    USA, PA

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