How have we used our 100 words this week?

Alfies 100 wc week 17

I will use two the more the more sentences

Los Santos is a scorching place where robbers, bandits and muggers lurk around the disgusting streets. Alfie is two of them he carries a knife and a gun everywhere even when he sleeps the more he kills the more he gets crazy to kill more and more and more MU HA HA HA . One stormy night Alfie went to a convenient store there was police helicopters every one of these lights was so bright he quickly ran through the bushes thinking he could get away but he got shot gunned in the face.

the end.

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2 Responses to “Alfies 100 wc week 17”

  1.   Mrs. Peterson (Team 100wc) Says:

    Alfie-Lee, the setting is a rough one and your story fits it well. Alfie is one (rather than two?) of the robbers and sounds like lots of trouble! I can hear the “MU HA HA HA” evil laughing because of your capital letters. Great idea! something to improve your writing is to reread and look for places to add end marks.

    Mrs. Peterson
    Texas, USA

  2.   Laura Alonso Says:

    Yikes Alfie! What a cool story! I love how you set the scene with the description of the place; it really pulls the reader into the story. And then of course there is the swift action that follows, like a scene from a film! Keep up the interesting writing!
    Laura A, Team100, Luxembourg

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