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ARCHIE BLOOM 100WC #WEEK23

I was walking on the path when I  saw a settee with a cat on it. I came back the next day to the same spot to find the settee not there. I was so confused so I went to  bed. when I got home and the was in front room. I woke the next morning and the settee was on fire and it burned down my house and my tortoise with it. and the settee was never seen a gain. until some one made a new one but that will never happen……………..

 

 

 

 

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Posted by on February 23rd, 2015 at 2:10 pm and tagged ,  | Comments & Trackbacks (6)




6 Responses to “ARCHIE BLOOM 100WC #WEEK23”

  1.   Laura Alonso Says:

    Archie,
    Wow, this settee certainly brings bad luck to many writers this week! I like how you describe the character’s confusion – including how characters feel makes your writing interesting to the reader. Next time why not try a bit more description of the surroundings and action?
    Keep up the good writing,
    Laura A, Team100, Luxembourg

  2.   Mrs Fairburn (Team 100WC - England) Says:

    Hello Archie, you have really thought about the prompt and written an unusual plot about it. You have used some good vocabulary like ‘so confused’. Well done.
    However, the story is a little difficult to follow because some words and punctuation are missing. A good tip is to read your work out aloud and see if it makes sense. Keep writing and entering the 100 Word Challenge.

  3.   Helen Whittaker (team 100WC) Says:

    Your 100WC this week uses the prompt well. I like the idea that the settee can move and is a force of evil that might return at any time. Scary!
    Your punctuation starts well but you do need to get into the habit of reading your writing back to yourself as the second half of your writing I needs better sentence punctuation. You’ve sometimes forgotten capital letters in this week’s 100WC but I’m sure you know where they should be as you’ve put in your full stops.

  4.   saffron lily Says:

    archie your work has got better can not whait till you get your fingers on a computer agin your work gives me a shiver up my spine when you next do one dont foget to post one to me or share one on a crome book i can not whait do one now plz i think you can be a athorn when we all grow up i can not whait till we go to park if you are not going tell me what school and i will go on there blogs and send you complments i think when you consentreate you can do work we

  5.   saffron lily Says:

    archie your work has got better can not whait till you get your fingers on a computer agin your work gives me a shiver up my spine when you next do one dont foget to post one to me or share one on a crome book i can not whait do one now plz i think you can be a athorn when we all grow up i can not whait till we go to park if you are not going tell me what school and i will go on there blogs and send you complments i think when you consentreate you can do work well done mate

  6.   saffron lily Says:

    archie your work has got better can not whait till you get your fingers on a computer agin your work gives me a shiver up my spine when you next do one dont foget to post one to me or share one on a crome book i can not whait do one now plz i think you can be a athorn when we all grow up i can not whait till we go to park if you are not going tell me what school and i will go on there blogs and send you complments i think when you consentreate you can do work well done mate
    xxxx

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