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dylan week 23

As he read the death letter, some animals in the letter started appearing. All of a sudden they tried biting him. A few weeks later, the police arrived and found a dead body. The animals that killed the man were back and tried to take out the police. Blood trickled around the animals mouths. The animals retreated to the jungle. Another week passed and then the swot team came by to have a look. The animals tried taking out the base of the swot cars but it was too late. The swot team were already at the sofa. The animals started turning into humans. The leader ( Tiger), whose name was Martin garrix, was questioned by the police.

Posted by on February 23rd, 2015 at 4:47 pm and tagged ,  | Comments & Trackbacks (3)




3 Responses to “dylan week 23”

  1.   Mr Greene (100 WC Team) Says:

    Well done Dylan on a very imaginary piece. There is certainly an awful lot going on in your story and this can make it hard to follow. Try to stick to one idea and give it a beginning, middle and end.

  2.   Mrs DW Team 100 Says:

    Dylan

    Thank you for sharing your story with us, it was well constructed and there was great flow to your story.

    It was an interesting take on the prompt.

    Well done.

  3.   Fiona (Team 100WC) Says:

    Hi Dylan,
    What a gory story! You describe events well and I could see your story happening in my head as I read. You use a lot of short sentences in your 100WC, can you see where you could have joined some of these with a connective word? This was a good effort- keep up the good work.
    Fiona (Team 100WC)

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