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elsie week 16

As I stepped nervously onto the stage ready to perform, I was amazed .The stage had purple, glistening lights flashing all over. I instantly felt like a super star. As I finally got to the middle of the colossal stage, the lights were so bright they stung my eyes. Then I thought to myself I should just take my chance and go for it even though the lights were flashing so fiercely in my eyes. I sang with all my heart on the bright, flashing, sparkly stage .After that I had finished singing like a star, I walked off excitedly.

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2 Responses to “elsie week 16”

  1.   Miss Heappey Says:

    Nice story Elsie. Your use of adjectives puts a really clear picture in the readers head, well done! I like how you describe the stage as colossal.
    Keep up the good work!
    Miss Heappey (Team 100WC)

  2.   H0pefulmummy (team 100wc) Says:

    Hi, Elsie. And what a star you are! This is a great piece of writing, containing a wonderful array of adjectives and verbs, creating a vivid and dramatic scene which invites me into the story and urges me to read more. You open strongly but I wonder if you could improve your closing sentence? I really enjoyed this story, Elsie – you have shone brightly this week!

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