How have we used our 100 words this week?

Kira Week 19

I could hear the wind whistling in the distance.

I could hear the animals playing and finding their prey.

I could hear the branches snapping.

I could see red eyes gleaming through the trees.

I could see a family walking along the slushy mud.

I could see leaves falling from tall trees.

I could feel the cold shiver up my spine

I could feel the rain hitting my face.

I could feel someone tapping my shoulder.

I touched a cold slimy tree.

I touched a log that looked like a giant.

I touched a strey lonely cute homeless dog

I feel my heart beating fast.

 

Posted by on January 26th, 2015 at 4:06 pm and tagged  | Comments & Trackbacks (5)




5 Responses to “Kira Week 19”

  1.   Ms. Ferri Says:

    Kira,

    I like that you wrote the response to the picture in this format of a poem. I thought that it was very powerful. I like how you described all of the different things that you could see. It is important to see that you can see many different things from just one image. Keep up the hard work.

    Alicia Ferri
    100 WC Team

  2.   Tyler Says:

    Hello Kira

    I really like the words ‘slushy mug’ because it tells me how the mud would of felt. Also, please can you put some more powerful words at the beginning instead of I. This also reminds me of when I went too a park and could see most of the thing you wrote down. I really like your piece of writing and well done. Why don’t you visit our blog with the link below.

    http://blog.st-marys-deane.bolton.sch.uk/y62014/

  3.   Caitlin Says:

    Great work. Wow, how did you come up with all that. Fantastic. Well done.

  4.   Ms. Sargent Team 100WC-USA Says:

    Kira,

    Nice job painting a picture in words from qhat you obaerved in the photo prompt. I thought using a poem format worked well. The only line that seem a bit discordant to me was the one ‘I touched a strey lonely cute homeless dog’ Maybe if there were one less word it would fit better. Also ‘stray’ rather than ‘strey.’

    Ms. Sargent
    Team 100WC-USA

  5.   Barbara McFall (Team 100WC) teacher at Phoenix School, Salem, MA USA Says:

    Hello Kira,
    It was refreshing to read a poem for 100WC. I enjoyed each of the images and actually liked that they were separate. I felt like each line was like a little story or moment in time all by itself. Good use of description to help your readers see the action in their minds.
    I look forward to reading more of your posts.

    Barbara McFall Team 100WC
    The Phoenix School, Salem, MA USA

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