How have we used our 100 words this week?

leanne 100 word challenge week 20

On the second of Febuary Riders school was going on a school trip to the zoo on a grey day. Even though the children didn’t have to do eney work, they were all miserable on the way there. When they finally arrived they had there sandwich and snack. After lunch they walked all the way to the other side of the zoo to see the vicious , angry and hungry hyena. As the teacher looked around, one member of her class had climbed over the fence and into the enclosure . HELP!!! HELP!!! HELP!!! What will happen to Luke???

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3 Responses to “leanne 100 word challenge week 20”

  1.   Nicola Richardson Says:

    What a fantastic way to end your writing! I really want to know what happened to Luke! I wonder why everyone was so miserable on their way to the zoo? I like your description of the hyena.
    Nicola Richardson, team 100wc, Tyne and Wear, UK

  2.   Fiona (Team 100WC) Says:

    Well done for fitting all the prompt words into your 100WC this week, Leanne; I thought it was a very tricky task. I loved the word ‘vicious’ for the hyena and thought you ended your 100WC very effectively- I was left wanting to know what happened next. Well done.
    Fiona (Team 100WC)

  3.   Ms. Sargent Team 100WC-USA Says:

    Hi Leanne,

    This certainly was a memorable trip to the zoo. I particularly liked the ending of your post because of the descriptive language and the excitement at the end. It was very different from the beginning which was more a list of what happened. Maybe you could make the whole piece more like the ending.

    Ms. Sargent
    Team 100 WC–USA

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