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Lewis M Week 18 100 WC

Thousands of years ago, I went for a walk in the woods. The wind was howling and the fresh evening air was filled with the aroma of crunchy leaves and dead moss. Then, I saw a shady figure. It walked around for a while then evaporated into thin air. Astounded and slightly confused, I ran like lightning towards the last place I saw the hooded figure. I stood in the spot. Nothing happened. Then, it all went black. I realised I was in a cave by the way it smelt and the rocky walls and ceiling. I felt around me trying to find something to escape. There was a ray of light ahead of me. What was that I could feel? It was slimy, scaly and it slithered around my body as I attempted to move. I clambered towards the light. When I had finally reached it. I looked down. It was a SERPENT! I punched it over and over again. Struggling to escape. Water started to gush from the ceiling. I was going to drown. I did not fight back. I just closed my eyes and collapsed into the salty water…

 

I am a Ghost. Now I roam around looking for my only clue. What happened to the figure? What happened to me?

 

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2 Responses to “Lewis M Week 18 100 WC”

  1.   Mr Morris (Team 100WC, Liverpool) Says:

    This is a fantastic piece of writing, Lewis – well done!
    Your use of ambitious language and the mature way in which you write made this short story a pleasure to read.

    I like the way that you have tried to use a range of different sentence openers. Just look carefully at the sentence that you have opened with a verb (struggling) – it doesn’t quite work!

    Keep up the excellent work!

  2.   Barbara McFall (Team 100WC) teacher at Phoenix School, Salem, MA USA Says:

    Hello Lewis,
    I loved reading your writing this week because it was full of description and words that made me want to read on and on! Your ending was unique with you wandering for maybe eternity?…. trying to solve the mystery.
    Thank you for a great piece.
    I look forward to reading more of your posts.

    Barbara McFall Team 100WC
    The Phoenix School, Salem, MA USA

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