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Saffron Week 12

He was shocked to find a small pony. Although it was cute and fluffy it had an evil look in its eye. Little did Lord Nulth know that this pony could shoot lazers from his eye, killing someone in the blink of an eye. Lord Nulth looked at his stone soldiers and asked “What is this idiotic creature doing here!” Then all of a sudden the harmless pony galloped across the room and blasted lazers at the monster. Lord Nulth stumbled and flipped over landing on his stone soldier. He was never seen again.

Posted by on November 21st, 2014 at 2:50 pm and tagged  | Comments & Trackbacks (5)




5 Responses to “Saffron Week 12”

  1.   bears Says:

    Really good
    Saffron

  2.   Mrs C (Team 100) Says:

    Saffron, I bet Lord Nulth was shocked to see a pony! You have, very cleverly, described the pony as cute, harmless and fluffy, but actually it is deadly; using complete opposites was imaginative. You have included complex sentences, which is very good, but you have some missing commas.Remember, commas separate the subordinate clause from the main clause. I was impressed by some of your vocabulary. I particularly like ‘stumbled,’ ‘flipped’ and ‘blasted,’ well done. Mrs C (Team 100)

  3.   Mrs Davis Says:

    Hi Saffron and thank you for entering the 100 WC! Well! This is the first 100 WC I’ve read this week where the contents of the sack have finished off the Lord of Nulth! I bet he wasn’t expecting that! You used some really good words, like “blink of an eye”, “idiotic”, “harmless”, “galloped”, “blasted”, “stumbled”, “flipped”. All of these words make your writing interesting to read. Well done and keep up the good work!
    Mrs Davis, Team 100, Cambridgeshire, UK

  4.   Helen Whittaker 100WC Says:

    What a good idea Saffron, to have a pony that looks harmless, yet is deadly! You’ve chosen some really adventurous vocabulary that helps the reader imagine what is going on. You’ve also punctuated well.
    A super 100WC this week Saffron.

  5.   saffron lily Says:

    thanks

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