How have we used our 100 words this week?

Tayler Week 19

To make sure I don’t put Capital letters in middle of sentences.


“C’mon sentinel don’t lie!”

“Im not I don’t even come from this planet!” I said

“Fine I’ll guess he is not one of them ,look Sarg just train him to be one of us and if you let him I’ll train him. We are the most elitess trained people on this Damn planet!”said the man

“We will train him if hes not good enough we lock you and him up and then
kill you ok!”Said presumably the Sergeant

I was transported to an armory of guns and more more guns.

“pick it up private we be doing a simulation of raiding a Sentinel outpost!”said my new trainer

I picked up an AK 74U and a laser pistol we trotted on to a street of darkness.

Street lights  beamed into my face.

“sentinel go Jack take him down!”Shouted the instructor

I aimed my gun then POW POW POW!

I killed him! Am I qualified?        Who knows?


Posted by on January 26th, 2015 at 2:10 pm and tagged  | Comments & Trackbacks (3)

3 Responses to “Tayler Week 19”

  1.   Mrs. Diestler (Team 100wc) Wisconsin, USA Says:

    You did a nice job working the picture into an interesting story line, Tayler. Even though it didn’t have a happy ending, it was very realistic. Make sure you remember to edit, so misspellings and incorrect punctuation do not take away from your interesting and entertaining entry.

  2.   Rumaanah Says:

    This is a very visual piece. Well done! You draw the reader into the story with your exciting narrative. Be careful of punctuation including commas, capital letters and spaces.

  3.   Barbara McFall (Team 100WC) teacher at Phoenix School, Salem, MA USA Says:

    Hello Tayler,
    Your writing had 2 different effects on me. I loved the adventure, but it made me realize that violence made me sad. Maybe you could use your good description in a happy story next time?
    I look forward to reading more of your posts.

    Barbara McFall Team 100WC
    The Phoenix School, Salem, MA USA

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