How have we used our 100 words this week?

Tayler Week #21

Target: Spelling & Punctuation

 

“Who’s that? Recruit? anyone you know?”asked Serena

“Oh It’s…It’s”as I take a closer look

“Oh My Its Steven n’ Skylar What they doing here?”I said

“Wait its your crew Members!”Serena asked

“We need them open fire!  Wait..What Dimensional Portal for what?”

 

The Silence was deafening as a baby brookeasarus came out of the portal

ARGGGBGGGGGGHHHH! Screamed the new nemesis of the world as they ran around crazily.

“Argh Just kill them”said Commander James

POW POW PO James was killed

“ARRGH Run leave the atlases here!”came the second sentinel

“Get EM’”

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One Response to “Tayler Week #21”

  1.   Fiona (Team 100WC) Says:

    Using speech in your work is often useful and makes a story and its characters much more interesting and you’ve had a good attempt at using speech in this 100WC. However, too much speech can make a story hard to understand, as the reader also needs to know what is happening as well as what is being said. I was swept along with the excitement of your story, but I found myself wishing that I knew more about what was happening and why. Speech is good, but try to get a good mixture of speech and action and your stories will become even better. Keep up the writing.
    Fiona (Team 100WC)

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