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Tayler’s Space MissionWeek #17

10,9,8,7,6,5,4,3,2,1 Blast off! our Rocket Exploded from the rocket staebler and Burned precious fuel as the rocket flew thousands feet from the surface of earth.”Velocity, “2948 MPH!,Duration of flight taken 2 minutes! and we are Fine for now i hope”said Mars Space Cadet Jack

“Wh-What do ya’ll Mean Fine?! we are almost there only 2400 more feet!”replied Mars Space Cadet Steve.

“More like 27789 more feet than your previous answer!”Said Jack

“You to stop arguing look we are-”

“Shut up Skylar!”said Jack & Steve

“We have left Obit!”said Skylar

then a Big enormous nearby Star Exploded KAPOW!

“Supernova!Engage booster drive NOW!”Commanded Jack

As we drove away gas from the supernova Melted the engine we fell,fell and fell until we crashed into an nover planet.

“the light was SO bright of the explosion of that star Destroyed earth! only 1567 of the population of earth made it on to this unknown planet.

 

 

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2 Responses to “Tayler’s Space MissionWeek #17”

  1.   Mrs C (Team 100) Says:

    Tayler, wow what a great storyline! I am impressed with how much space related vocabulary you have used. I can also see you have included adjectives and a variation of punctuation. I think, in your enthusiasm, you forgot the rules regarding capital letters, which I am sure you know. This is a common mistake, but can easily be rectified if you double check your work at the end. It pays to read your work several times, once looking for good word choices, then again for punctuation and even a third if necessary. I hope I get to read another of your stories again soon, as you obviously have a talent for them, well done. Mrs C (Team 100)

  2.   Mrs. Peterson (Team 100wc) Says:

    Tayler, I’m guessing that you like outer space and rockets, am I correct? Your detailed story with dialogue is quite intense as the characters have left the orbit and are experiencing the unknown. You have some extra capital letters showing up in your writing. Do a double-check for editing and improving your work a bit further. Keep up the great work!

    Mrs. Peterson
    Texas, USA

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