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The dream Tayler week ~23

Target:Reduce speech

 

Jack fell with a thump as the radius of the brookerasurus slam. All Jack could see was darkness, evil’s darkness. Suddenly he woke up with a familiar wetness on his face. IT WAS RAIN! This was a feeling he had not felt in years. Sitting up he saw an island made of dirt and rock. Was it EARTH in ruins? He then noticed a metallic couch he walked towards the couch whilst feeling a presence watching him.  Then Feeling it has a connection to the spiritual realm he began to walk behind it as he noticed a sign saying “Here lies Legendary Rayquaza!”………

Posted by on February 23rd, 2015 at 2:08 pm and tagged  | Comments & Trackbacks (2)




2 Responses to “The dream Tayler week ~23”

  1.   Jacqueline Grima (Team 100) Says:

    Hi Tayler, this is a really interesting piece of writing and I really enjoyed reading it. I especially like all the interesting words you have used like ‘radius’,’familiar wetness’ and ‘metallic’. I also like how you have used a question to take the reader into your character’s mind. Just make sure you read your work through before you post to make sure it all makes sense. Well done!

  2.   Mrs DW Team 100 Says:

    Tayler

    Thank you for sharing your story with us.

    It read really well and you hit your target really well, the flow to the story was well constructed and it was a pleasure to read.

    I would like to see where this story leads.

    Well done.

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