How have we used our 100 words this week?

the settee[100wc week23]

I was sat on the settee.My friends called it the settee of truth.Only so I would make some wooden weapons and we would pretend to kill each other .that was before we started to go to the pizza castle ,that became are favorite place but we would go to the settee every now and then . But now we left one by one until i was the only left now i will make new friends or i mite try to find them……

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4 Responses to “the settee[100wc week23]”

  1.   Mrs Johnson (Team 100) Says:

    Hi Mason. I like the name ‘The Settee of Truth’! It would be nice to see your story develop this idea a bit more. Remember to read your work through before publishing to ensure it makes sense and that you have used all the necessary punctuation. When referring to yourself as ‘I’, always use the capital letter.
    Thank you for entering this week’s challenge and keep on writing 🙂
    Mrs Johnson, Team 100

  2.   Miss Willing Says:

    Hi Mason. Well done for using the prompt in your writing. I would have liked to have had a little description about it. When I am writing, I always read back through before I publish to check that it all makes sense- you might have spotted that you have missed some capital letters and full stops. I like how you have named the sofa and given it a purpose.
    Did you realise that you only used 82 words this week? You still had 18 left!
    Well done for entering this week’s 100 word challenge.
    Miss Willing, Team 100WC,
    Huntingdon, England

  3.   Mrs Skinner (Team100) Bristol UK Says:

    Hello Mason.
    I’m really pleased that you joined 100 word challenge this week. I found it quite tricky reading your work though and wondered if you could help me. If you read it out loud to yourself, you would be able to hear that your great ideas are a little muddled. You will find that if you put some punctuation in as well, it would really make a difference.
    I am looking forward to reading more of your work!

  4.   Helen Whittaker (team 100WC) Says:

    Your story for this week’s 100WC starts really well with the idea it is a settee of truth. I think you could have used this more in the rest of your writing, perhaps by having your friends telling the truth?
    Sometimes you have used commas to link ideas together where you might have been better to split the ideas into new sentences. Look at your last sentence and see if you could make it into shorter sentences.

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