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Tillie Week 19

One day i was walking to school and i met up with my freainds.later on when i had finshed school i was soo boerd so i decided to play my xbox.Whilst i was on my xbox i was playing minecraft.Later on i suddenly heard a noise out side i sneakly  peered out of my window and saw nothing.Then 1 hour later i heard that strange noise again so out side again and this time our bin was shaking vilently.So i went outside and looked in the bin POUNCE a baby fox jumped out into my arms so i saw its family out of the corner of my eye  so i jently layed it carfully with his lovely family.

 

Posted by on January 26th, 2015 at 2:26 pm and tagged  | Comments & Trackbacks (3)




3 Responses to “Tillie Week 19”

  1.   Samuel Says:

    Hi Tillie,
    I liked your 100wc,because exsplane about the fox and said baby fox incited of fox. You also used a fantastic connective,[suddenly]. To improve your writing make sure you use capital letters for I and the beginning of the sentence,also make sure you leave a space after the full stop.
    You may want to get ideas from our blog at [http://blog.st-marys-deane.bolton.sch.uk/y62014/]

  2.   Caitlin Says:

    Well done Tillie that was so good, infact that was fabulous

  3.   Thomas Hugo Says:

    I thought the story was really good keep up the good work

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