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Trinity week 23

Strolling through the dark and gloomy forest, I saw a dull settee with dust, dirt and leaves all over it so I slowly walked over and sat down on it. I wasn’t thinking what I was doing at that moment…Slipping through the middle of the settee, I fell down, down and down until THUD!! Hitting the ground I saw a small dark room. I scurried to my feet and tried to drag myself out but there was nothing to grab onto. I looked up to see a way but I found myself stuck.Looking down at the floor something dragged me down… GHOST!!!

Posted by on February 23rd, 2015 at 4:44 pm and tagged ,  | Comments & Trackbacks (2)




2 Responses to “Trinity week 23”

  1.   Mrs DW Team 100 Says:

    Trinity

    Thank you for sharing your story with us.

    Your sentences were well constructed and the story flowed really well, to keep the reader interested.
    I enjoyed the resit ion of down down down, and it really gave a sense of falling.

    Well done keep it up.

  2.   Fiona (Team 100WC) Says:

    Your story had a feeling of suspense from the start, because of the clever use of words like ‘ dark’ ‘dull’ and ‘gloomy’. These words give the reader a sense of what is to come. Your story is well crafted and you use your imagination to great effect. By using interesting words, like ‘scurried’ and ‘strolling’, you make your story fun to read. Well done- good work.
    Fiona (Team 100WC)

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