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Week 19 Charlie D

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Flying across the sky there was a shooting star which crashed landed on a local pizzeria and I was destined to get a job as security guard at night there. Also I died on my first night yeah, my first night I suck at my job but I didn’t die by burglars, no I died of the animatronic there. So why am I dead from them who caused the bite of ‘87 well it was ……………………

mangle I know what you’re thinking yall say foxy was the candidate but magle bites you in your front lobe, you die instantly and then….

Posted by on January 26th, 2015 at 2:23 pm and tagged  | Comments & Trackbacks (2)




2 Responses to “Week 19 Charlie D”

  1.   Caitlin Says:

    Fantastic, well done, wow, fab

  2.   Mrs Fine (100WC Team) Says:

    Hi Charlie.
    I have to say, I got a little confused with your piece this week. I think you start off well – I can see you like using unusual language and your starting sentence is great. I especially like the verb ‘destined’ – it adds so much to the verb ‘to get’. It also alerts your reader to the fact that this is probably not going to be an ‘ordinary’ story. And indeed this turns out to be the case although I think you may have brought quite a lot of computer games into your writing? That’s fine as long as it makes sense to your reader as well as yourself. I look forward to reading some more of your exciting writing.

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